Read the short article "Personal Income" in the links at the bottom of the page, then answer the following prompt.
What are the reasons personal income is falling in the state of Michigan? Use the information in the article and be specific in writing your answers. Remember, it is expected that you write a good paragraph and use complete sentences. Pay attention to my comments. If I tell you your answer needs to be more complete, do a second post that completes your answer for full credit.
Sep 22, 2009
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The reason Michigan's personal income is falling is because of the failing auto industry. Before the eight-year recession, the states' auto factories allowed workers, despite their education level. The drop of personal income in Michigan is connected to the education level of the states' citizens. According the Census Bureau, Michigan's education level ranks 35th in the nation. It has been shown that the on-going recession has taken a bigger toll on the state of Michigan. It has revealed that fewer people owned their own homes and the number of renters increased 26 percent. Michigan is in a tight bind that no one knows when we will get of it.
Tarick,
Check your second sentence. It is not complete or well-formed.
Ms. A
The correction of the second sentence:
Before the eight-year recession, the states' auto factories allowed workers, despite their education level and to stay employeed.
The reason why the personal income of Michigan is low is because Michigan is a low college level state. The only reason Michigan's income was high in the first place was because of the auto industry. Now that the auto business is falling apart, it starting to reflect on Michigan's economy. All of the college educated people are leaving the state. Leaving Michigan with no back up plan for it's economy.
Personal income is failing in the state of michigan for two main reasons. Reason one is because our education levels are low. Studies show that personal income is directly tied in with education levels. Reason two is because the Big 3 is failing. The reason that Michigan's personal income level has remained high without the appropriate education levels was because they were relying on the Big 3. Now that they have failed, they have nothin to rely on, and personal income is declining drastically.
Javonte,
Check your last two sentences. You can combine these to make one sentence that flows better.
Personal income is failing in the state of michigan for two main reasons. Reason one is because our education levels are low. Studies show that personal income is directly tied in with education levels. Reason two is because the Big 3 is failing. The reason that Michigan's personal income level has remained high without the appropriate education levels was because they were relying on the Big 3. Now that they have failed, they have nothin to rely on, and personal income is declining drastically.
Taylor,
Clarify how the big three contributed to high income levels in Michigan. Be very specific.
Correction: All of the college educated people are leaving the state, leaving Michigan with no back up plan for it's economy.
i think the reason why michigan income is falling because of the education in michigan.the income drops were connected with the education level of residents.people who owned homes last year and were more college graduates leaving the state.thats why the income has failed.
Personal income is failing in the state of michigan for two main reasons. Reason one is because our education levels are low. Studies show that personal income is directly tied in with education levels. Reason two is because the Big 3 is failing. The reason that Michigan's personal income level has remained high without the appropriate education levels was because they were relying on the Big 3. With the Big 3, they were offering jobs to people who did not have a college degree. The people who did not have a college degree really relied on the Big 3 for a job. Now that they have failed, they have nothin to rely on, and personal income is declining drastically.
The state of Michigan personal imcome have been plummenting because our educational system are not as others countries and states in the United States. The Big Three is falling because of the finacial problems in the economy. The Big three seems like it's not moving forward successfully yet. Employers from the factories are becoming upset because their checks are coming in lower than what they getting before the finacial problems or they becoming unemployeed. Also some people was getting laid off because of the lack of education, For example say someone only had an high school degree instead of an college degree you'll get laid off for the lack of your education.
The reason why Michigan is having so many fanacial problems is because our lack of college educated population. Michigan biggest industrie the auto industrie is dying because of the lack of money,workers are being laid off which wasn't the case before the 8 year reccession because workers diddn't need a college degree to work for one of the auto industries in Michigan.
Michigans college graduates are leaving Michigan which means the state of michigan is losing its industries and industry workers.
Candace,
State the main point of this article and two supporting details in a new post. Re-read if needed.
Teresa,
Is the word employers properly used. What is the correct form of that word needed in your response?
Audra,
Check your last sentence. Make sure it is clear and makes sense.
The reason why Michigan is in a crisis is because not enough jobs are coming to Michigan and the jobs that do come to Michigan leave fast. If the state of Michigan had more jobs, the state wouldnt be in so much debt.The loss of jobs and the education system go hand in hand in this situation. The Big 3 factories workers only need a high school diploma but everyother job in Michigan require higher education. I think if Michigan gets more jobs, It'll be fine.
Michigan income is falling because of the auto industry. In Michigan our auto industry is what we back on for our income. And now that the auto is falling apart we have nothing else to back on. Our education level is very low. I believe that is because alot of jobs only want you to have an high school education. So people look at that as there only expection is to get an high school education. They feel they only need a high school education to get a job. If our education rate do not go up Michigan is goin to be in an reccession for a long time.
their falling because of failing industries. now that we are in the eight year reccesion they dont really allow that many worker any more. michigans education level is ranked 35th in the nation. fewer people own thier homes now tpeople are renting rather than owning.
Niger,
You have good content and clear examples. All you need to do is clarify the first sentence. Perhaps two sentences that express the same idea would make your response even better.
Kiara,
The second to last sentence has too many ideas compacted into one sentence. Rewrite this sentence as two sentences.
Jackie,
Clarify your details. Everytime you make a statement, write another sentence that explains the concept further.
Michigan's personal income is falling because of the auto industry. They are allowing worker's, despite their lack of college degrees to make more money. Then all workers need is a high school diploma to work in the auto industry. also michigans personal income is falling because our education level is low.
Jade,
Re-word your second two sentences for clarity and logical falacy.
Personal income is falling in Michigan because of the auto crisis situation. Most people in Michigan were employed by the Big Three. Now that the companies are having trouble, most residents are unemployed. Factories provided residents with high paying positions, without college degrees. Factory workers felt they did not need a college degree because they were making good money without it.
the reason why michigan income is falling because of the education systems and the lack of jobs in the state.people didnt go to college because of the big three.the big three is a job offering for people without an college degree.so people feeled they didnt need to go to college,and the personal income is interfered with the education systems.
The reason why Michigan is in a crisis is because not enough jobs are coming to Michigan and the jobs that do come to Michigan leave fast. If the state of Michigan had more jobs, the state wouldnt be in so much debt.The loss of jobs and the education system go hand in hand in this situation. The Big 3 factories workers only need a high school diploma.But everyother job in Michigan requires a higher education. I think if Michigan gets more jobs and education, the economy will get better
Michigan's personal income is falling because the auto business is falling. Most people worked in the factories doing one thing or another. Factory workers began working right after high school so they didn't really go to college. Straight to the factory from high school was the way to go. This on going recession has taken a big toll on Michigan's citizen, cutting back paychecks or getting fired has really hurt the citizens’ personal income. Not that many people own their own homes to the lack of money. Michigan's situation is HORRIBLE...No one really knows when things would change for the better instead of for worst. That's why it's real important to go school to better your education. In the article I just read figures suggest when incomes dropped it was connected to the education level of the residents. Living in the county that had the highest number, Wayne County, I believe the students have an opportunity to change the way Michigan's financial problems by changing our own.
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